"The Lady in the Looking Glass" by Virginia Woolf

While we continue individual conferences about thesis drafts, please read "The Lady in the Looking Glass" and respond to the questions at the end.

How does Woolf's narration compare to the narrators of your primary sources?

HW: Continue revising. Be prepared to share your introductory and concluding paragraphs with a peer on Thursday.

More Modernism

Do Now: Modernist Mix tape - Connect the following songs to the author (Eliot, Woolf, Stein, Faulkner, Joyce) who influenced them:

"Shakespeare's Sister" by the Smiths

"Hollow Man" by R.E.M.

"Roseability" by Idlewild

"The Sensual World" by Kate Bush

"A Rose for Emily" by the Zombies

1. An excerpt from A Room of One's Own: Reread the explanation of the title's multiple meanings. Do your thesis authors create rich titles like this one?
2. Strong Argument: What is Woolf arguing in this excerpt? What rhetorical devices* (e.g., rhetorical questions, irony, sentence structure, alliteration, etc.) does Woolf use and to what effect?
3. Connection: Read Atwood's "Spelling" and make a connection to the excerpt.

HW: Identify the section of your draft that needs the most work.

*Some examples include:
 Rhetorical Question: “How, then, could it have been born among women … by all the power of law and custom?”
 Irony: “It is unthinkable that any woman in Shakespeare’s day should have had Shakespeare’s genius.”  Sentence structure, listing: “For genius like Shakespeare’s is not born among labouring, uneducated, servile people.”
 Alliteration: “Bronte or Burns blazes…proves its presence.”
http://woolf.bloomu.edu/wp-content/uploads/2014/10/ela-11.1.3.pdf

Peer Editing

Please share your draft with a classmate.

Using the handout, read your classmate's draft and offer feedback on the four criteria for strong body paragraphs. While you need not cover every checkpoint (there are 22 of them, after all), please do use them to focus your feedback.

HW: Apply at least one suggestion to your draft.


Some inspiration from writer Anne Lamott...

"Thirty years ago my older brother, who was ten years old at the time, was trying to get a report on birds written that he'd had three months to write. It was due the next day. We were out at our family cabin in Bolinas, and he was at the kitchen table close to tears, surrounded by binder paper and pencils and unopened books on birds, immobilized by the hugeness of the task ahead. Then my father sat down beside him, put his arm around my brother's shoulder, and said, 'Bird by bird, buddy. Just take it bird by bird.'" 
-Anne Lamott, Bird by Bird: Some Instructions on Writing and Life

Please heed the checkpoints on our thesis calendar. They're there so that you don't become "immobilized by the hugeness of the task ahead." Follow Lamott's father's advice and "take it bird by bird." That might mean a paragraph a day or every other day. It might mean sentence by sentence. Find a routine that works best for you and stick to it. 

Drafting Continued

We're getting there!

Do Now: What are three words that best capture the topic of your thesis paper? How might you use this information to help generate a hook or title for the piece?

Please choose a focus for today's lab time: drafting body paragraphs; drafting an introduction; drafting transition paragraphs between big ideas; drafting a conclusion; revising body paragraphs.

HW: Rough draft due 3/31. Make sure you've shared it with me (mreynolds@belmontschools.net)!

Introductions and Conclusions

Do Now: Watch the opening shot from Robert Altman's The Player and notice how the screenwriters pitch their movie ideas. If you had to "pitch" your thesis to someone, what information would you include?

1. Introductions and Conclusions
2. Drafting Continued
3. Exit Ticket: Thinking back to my "pitch," I could introduce my essay with...

HW: Keep drafting! The full draft should be ready for peer review on 3/31.

Focused Revisions

Please use today's lab time to either pare down a lengthy paragraph or draft a transition between big idea sections (i.e., signposting). If you decide to work on the former, then look over the "Control Paragraph Length" handout and try at least one of the strategies there. If you choose to work on the latter, then consult the "Topic Sentences and Signposting" handout for a model transition paragraph.

HW: Continue drafting!

Topic Sentences and Signposting

Do Now: Look at the topic sentences in your draft-in-progress. Do they "argue rather than report" what the reader can expect to follow in the paragraph? Mark those that do not.

1. Topic Sentences and Signposting
2. Revising and/or Continuing to Draft

HW: Please add at least two paragraphs by Thursday (rough draft due 31 March)

"If the same idea can be expressed in a simple way or in a complex way, the simple way is better - and, paradoxically, it will typically lead readers to conclude that the writer is smarter." -Bryan Garner, A Dictionary of Modern American Usage